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Title: Only the Strong, 29/? (Draft Version)
Author: Jaye (Copyright June 2007)
Codes: (Vaako/Dame Vaako), Riddick/Vaako NC-17

Summary: Riddick discovers his troubles have just begun.

ONLY THE STRONG

Title: Only the Strong, 29/? (Draft Version)
Author: Jaye (Copyright June 2007)
Codes: (Vaako/Dame Vaako), Riddick/Vaako NC-17

Disclaimer: The Chronicles of Riddick and all related characters and concepts are the property of David Twohy et al. No infringement is intended or profit made. This is NC-17 for adult themes, violence, sex, and language. If you aren't interested (or aren't old enough), don't read it.

Archive: No.

Feedback: Yes, please, positive or negative, especially suggestions for improvement. E-mail is reader8901@fastmail.fm

Summary: Riddick discovers his troubles have just begun.

Note: Set immediately after the end of the movie. I've only seen the Director's Cut of TCOR, so some things might not jibe with the theatrical version.

Previous chapters: HERE

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CHAPTER 29

"Zhylaw sure could pick 'em."

"What?" Vaako blinked, settled his feet more firmly as he caught his breath. He didn't feel as drained as he expected; whatever that surge was, it had left him faintly buzzing with the strange energy.

He did a quick visual scan of the surroundings, but everyone seemed to be in shock. Tried to ignore the multitude of eyes fixed on him, glad the screen behind them had gone dark during his...episode. When his gaze crossed Julian Campbell's he offered a minute nod of thanks.

Campbell, of course, didn't return the gesture, but Vaako allowed himself to relax slightly. He'd taken a risk, asking the Tech to be his back-up, but it seemed he'd chosen the right person to trust with his plans.

Piles of ash still smoldered here and there, most inside the armor of the Guardian's troops. The remaining Gate protectors were standing far from their weapons.

A quick snap of his fingers got his Commanders' attention. "Troan, Jarrah," was all he said, but it put the men into motion. As Vaako's Warriors secured the guns and the area, he turned his attention to Riddick, who was standing with his arms crossed and head tilted.

Vaako didn't trust the speculative expression on Riddick's face. "What?" he asked again, wariness drawing his brows together.

Riddick unfolded his arms and reached out, tapping Vaako's chest. Vaako blinked, vaguely remembering Riddick pulling at the straps of his cuirass and top. He looked down and his jaw dropped. There was a mark faintly glowing on his skin, already starting to fade. Now that he was aware of it he could sense it as the slightest throb.

He didn't think any of the others were close enough to see it, but he turned aside regardless to fix his clothing to conceal the...brand? "What *is* that?" he hissed.

Riddick's grunt was not informative, and Vaako would swear it sounded amused. Looking up confirmed it---that wide grin was dazzling under the lights. Riddick drawled, "You don't feel dizzy or anythin', right? 'Cause usually you're quicker on the uptake."

Vaako scowled and was about to growl when Riddick provided an answer. "Seems like you just gave a demo on how the Rage of Furya's *supposed* to go down. And you didn't even kiss the concrete after---lucky fucker."

Riddick slowly shook his head. "Gotta love the irony. Z-man spent half his life scared shitless of Furyans---and he had 'em at his right *and* left hands."

"That's not...I can't possibly..." Vaako shut his mouth, hearing the faint click of his teeth meeting. He took a deep breath, pushing aside his denial, his confusion---and the implications if Riddick was correct. "What do you mean?"

"Just that you and that Purifier you left on Hell Central had more in common than bad fashion choices. Never seen him do the eyeball thing, though." Riddick shrugged and moved on, apparently, looking over the murmuring crowd. "So what happens now?"

Aereon answered as she approached bearing two large bottles. "Well, first I would suggest using this water to eliminate your rather strong stench," she said as she held out the items, "but I suppose hydration must be your first concern."

Vaako ignored her jibe in favor of scanning the bottles and their contents. At least his vambraces seemed unaffected by the day's events. "They're safe." He accepted one of the bottles and opened it, lifting it to his lips to sip the cool liquid.

He couldn't keep from focusing on the bob of Riddick's Adam's apple as the other man tilted his head back for large gulps. A silvery trail of water trickled from the corner of Riddick's mouth to make its lazy way down the strong column of his throat. Vaako swallowed, wrenching his gaze away.

Only to meet the Elemental's sharp eyes. "You've surprised me yet again, Commander," Aereon said. "I find that rather disconcerting."

"You're not the only one," Vaako muttered, ignoring Riddick's snort. He focused on his drink, letting the water soothe tissues parched from the long battle. When he'd sated his thirst he gave his bottle to Aereon and glanced over at Riddick once more. "I'm not sure what the next step should be. Protocol demands that the Guardian declare a winner of the bouts, and he opens the Gates of the Threshold for the Lord Marshal."

He paused, his gaze straying to a certain pile of ash. "But with the Guardian...eliminated, I'm not sure who has the authority to---"

"I could offer my services." Cevris's rich voice carried over to them as he strolled up, Celeste and Purifier Reese on either side.

Vaako frowned, uncertain how to word his concerns. Riddick, of course, had no such need for tact. The Furyan locked onto Cevris, his free hand straying to rest on a throwing knife. "You sure changed your tune quick now that your 'alliance' has gone to shit," Riddick said. "Thought you didn't want 'the breeder' dirtyin' up your pretty UnderVerse."

Cevris's expression sobered, and his answer held all of the deference his previous interactions with Riddick had lacked. "You prevailed against all challenges, my lord. Even those that seemed impossible to overcome." He paused, and Vaako tensed under the sudden scrutiny of dark eyes that had once read him all too well. "The means of your victory may have raised many questions, but victory it was, nonetheless."

Then Cevris looked back at Riddick and continued, "Understand, I may have...manipulated circumstances a bit, but I would never have sanctioned the Guardian's violation of the Necromonger Way."

He shrugged. "You have confirmed that you *are* the Lord Marshal. UnderVerse is now yours by right."

Vaako regarded his mentor; Cevris had the look of a man surrendering to the inevitable. It made him straighten his own shoulders, affronted by his elder's attitude. "From what I understand, there should be little opportunity for sabotage at the Gates themselves."

He glanced at Riddick, wishing he could peer behind the goggles for some clue to the other man's thoughts. "Cevris is an acknowledged authority figure, as well as one of the leaders of a cabal that sought to depose you. His stamp of approval would go far in silencing any further protests."

"I like my way of silencing 'em just fine," Riddick drawled with a stroke of the knife hilt. He handed his bottle back to Aereon with a nod before looking at Cevris and shrugging. "But somebody's gotta play slam boss, so if you want the job you got it."

Vaako froze, could sense the startled stillness in the others. Had Riddick decided that Vaako's strange manifestation made him no longer trustworthy? Perhaps Riddick viewed a fellow Furyan---assuming the theory was true---as a rival rather than an ally? Even Vaako's lips felt stiff. "I can assure you, Riddick, I'm fully capable of keeping order until you return from UnderVerse."

"You're gonna be a little busy, V." Riddick twisted his head to eye Vaako. "I ain't about to go trippin' the 'verses without back-up." He sidled closer.

The light grasp of Riddick's fingers seared the skin between the edge of the vambrace and Vaako's elbow. Riddick's voice was a low rumble in his ear, breath a hot puff against sensitive tissues. "You're with me."

"That's forbidden!" Purifier Reese broke their contact as he pushed himself between them, heedless of any danger as he thrust his face up to Riddick's. "My lord, only the Lord Marshal may make the pilgrimage---for a lesser being to even *view* UnderVerse is sacrilege."

Vaako knew he should be yanking the fool out of the range of Riddick's displeasure. But he was still reeling in shock. Since his first purification decades ago, he'd strived to be worthy of UnderVerse. To someday join the ranks of the Necromongers before him who had crossed the Threshold at the due time of their deaths.

To enter UnderVerse while still in the flesh...that was a privilege he'd never conceived of. Even when Celeste had purred assassination plans in his ears, dangling dreams of taking that last step beyond First Among Commanders to become "Lord Vaako".

But even more than that, he was stunned by the chance Riddick was taking. To allow Vaako into UnderVerse was to give him an equal opportunity to seize that realm's power---if Vaako wished, he could become a Holy Half-Dead, with all of the abilities the transformation placed at his command.

There was no guarantee that Vaako would practice what he preached and refuse the power of UnderVerse. Or refrain from turning that power on Riddick and claiming the title of Lord Marshal for himself. Keeping what he killed, according to the Necromonger Way that had been drilled into him since childhood. "Lord Vaako" indeed.

Of course Riddick had to have considered the risks---even more, since Riddick couldn't know that Vaako had reverted to an unpurified state. As far as Riddick was concerned, Vaako was purified, and held the advantage once the Threshold was crossed. Self-preservation dictated Riddick enter UnderVerse alone. Instead he wanted Vaako at his side.

Vaako sought the shining eyes behind dark lenses. When he knew he held Riddick's attention, he dipped his head once, briefly. An acknowledgment, and a promise that Riddick's trust would not be betrayed.

The nod he received in return did nothing to settle his questions or concerns, but warmed him just the same. Granted him hope for the future, and all its possibilities.

Which could be explored as soon as they could silence Reese's jabbering. The Purifier's diatribe had faded from Vaako's awareness during his few moments of reflection, but now the man's continued protests were starting to grate.

Part of him wondered why Riddick hadn't yet smacked the man upside the head. The same part wished Riddick would hurry up and get to it.

Celeste's voice startled him as she cut across Reese's rant. "Purifier, enough. You'll do yourself an injury." She glided to the man's side, sliding one arm through his and drawing him away from Riddick with the grace she was renowned for.

"You must understand, this is the dawn of a new age," she said, her tone one of such profound reasonableness Vaako blinked again.

Thought he saw Aereon and Cevris do the same as Celeste continued, "Every Lord Marshal has put his stamp on the Necromonger Way. Proposed something that was no doubt 'sacrilege' in the eyes of his people at the time. I, too, believed that the breeder had no place on the throne. But we all witnessed the utter destruction of Lord Riddick's challengers. He has kept what he killed. Surely it is a sign our god is willing to accept him, and thus the changes that will come with his reign."

The Purifier did not prove immune to such formidable charms. He quieted, frowning as he seemed to consider Celeste's words. But only for a moment.

He shook his head, the headpiece signifying his office perilously close to dislodging. "No. No matter what you say, I cannot condone such a blatant disregard for our sacred traditions."

"So you offer challenge to the Lord Marshal?" One perfectly-groomed eyebrow arched as Celeste became the picture of innocence. "Are you sure that's wise, Purifier Reese?"

The man's eyes bulged as he looked over at Riddick, who gave him a shark's grin. Reese gulped and seemed to crowd Celeste in a not-so-subtle effort to escape. "Of course I'm not challenging Lord Riddick! I simply---"

"You simply want your concerns addressed." Celeste's purr accompanied a pat to the arm she held captive. "And the Lord Marshal *has* heard you. But if his decision is unchanged, you must challenge...or acquiesce."

"I...I suppose I...must...should..." The Purifier took a deep breath and moved away from Celeste to bow before Riddick. "I will reflect upon this, my lord."

Vaako kept himself from grinning at Celeste's cleverness as Riddick dismissed the man with a nod. Perhaps it was lingering euphoria from the strange energy surge, but Vaako could envision his former mate becoming an ally in the new regime. And maybe even a friend.

In gratitude Vaako lifted up one delicate hand to bestow a kiss on the knuckles, a gesture from before their marriage, one lost years ago. "Thank you," he murmured. As he straightened he kept the hold, his thumb lightly brushing over her fingers.

Celeste's smile was teasing, but held nothing of coyness; maybe she too sensed the change, the new parameters. "Perhaps I'm simply ensuring I'm not part of your next spontaneous barbecue."

He released her with a last squeeze. "Perhaps." Or perhaps Celeste spoke the truth, and had reconciled herself to life under the rule of 'the breeder'. He hoped so. Riddick still had many challenges to face, and would benefit from such a savvy Councilor. A slight smile tugged at his lips as she turned away to once more take her seat.

"If the dramatics are finished, I suggest we begin," Cevris said, his tone and expression carefully bland. Vaako hoped as well that Celeste's defection would spur Cevris to reevaluate his own position. Cevris was held in high esteem, and there would be more trouble ahead if his capitulation to Riddick's rule was only temporary.

"Yeah, let's get this shit over with," Riddick said as he shifted to fully face the crowd.

Vaako reached out to keep Cevris from stepping away. He lowered his voice to warn, "Gerard, you'll have little opportunity for plotting if the reports of time-dilation within UnderVerse are proven true."

He paused, held the dark eyes of the man he'd looked up to for most of his life. "But even if they're not, you'll find that this room has been locked down completely, and all communications with the armada have been severed...at least temporarily."

When Vaako scanned the water he'd confirmed that Campbell had instituted comm silence. With Vaako now heading into UnderVerse, it would be up to the Second Tech to decide how long to wait before breaking that silence.

And whether to implement the rest of Vaako's plan, if he and Riddick were lost to UnderVerse forever.

Of all possible reactions from Cevris, Vaako was unprepared for the older man's rusty laugh. "I should have expected as much." His gaze flicked over Vaako, and Vaako could sense the muscles in Cevris's arm relaxing under his grip as the older man offered a slight bow before moving off to make his announcement and confer with the remainder of the Guardian's troops.

"If you don't mind I'm just going to wander over to chat with your sub-commanders," Aereon said, one brow lifting. "It might be wise to acquire something more modern than a pointed stick before you go traipsing into unknown territory."

As she moved away Vaako heard her mutter, "And I wouldn't mind packing a pistol or two myself."

Riddick grunted beside him, and the sound was definitely amused.

Vaako checked his weapons and vambraces as they waited for Cevris to finish addressing the crowd. He noticed Riddick start to do the same. Almost immediately a Warrior approached bearing a selection of energy guns collected from the Guardian's forces.

As he holstered his second pistol, Vaako looked up to see Cevris approaching with one of the Gate guards. "If you're ready," Cevris said, "we can proceed to the Threshold."

Then he and the guard walked right past Riddick and Vaako to the wall underneath the giant screen. Vaako watched the guard uncover a panel and enter a complex passcode. Riddick nudged his shoulder, and he fell into step as they crossed to a section of wall sliding aside to reveal a dimly-lit corridor. He stopped when Riddick did, before the entrance.

"After you," Riddick said to Cevris with a gracious gesture that had Vaako suppressing another grin.

Cevris raised a brow, but Vaako noticed *he* made the guard go first. When they were past the doorway the panel slid shut behind them. The blue-tinged black of Necromonger architecture was carried over into this hidden space. The ceiling arched into darkness somewhere above them, and the walls were lined with likenesses of the Lord Marshals. Their empty eyes peered down at the four of them as they made their way along the corridor, footsteps ringing.

When they reached the end the Gates rose up before them, tall as the entire structure and set with ridges and curves that seemed to undulate as they stared. Set within one of the massive panels was a single door, as tall as the Guardian had been, and as wide as the man's outstretched arms.

Before the Gates and slightly to the side was a single control panel on a podium, facing away from the Gates. Cevris and the guard strode to the station, the blue glow of the controls highlighting the planes of their faces. "When you're in position, my lord, I'll key open the portal and you can cross the Threshold."

"I ain't turnin' my back on anybody who wanted me dead two hours ago," Riddick said as he crossed to stand next to the men at the podium. In a blur of motion he had the guard in a headlock. The man flailed for a minute, then slumped unconscious in Riddick's arms. He dropped like a stone when Riddick released him. "No offense."

"None taken," Cevris said as he glanced down at the guard. "Let me know when you're ready."

Vaako kept an eye on Cevris as Riddick walked to the inset doorway, then turned his back to it and pushed up his goggles. Vaako stepped forward at Riddick's gesture, but before he could take up his own position rough hands clamped around his biceps, dragging him up against a hard body clad in a harder cuirass.

He gasped, and was suddenly engulfed in a kiss that staked an undeniable claim. Full lips pressed to his own, a determined tongue snaked in to map every surface of his mouth. Sensations of heat and wet and need fired his senses.

Broke Riddick's hold on his arms to wrap a hand around Riddick's waist and reach the other up to Riddick's nape, the barest prickle there tingling against his palm and fingers. As Riddick's hands dug into his hips he began his own plundering of Riddick's mouth---the taste of his lover somehow sharper, setting primal urges shimmering in his blood and under his skin, in rhythm with the renewed throb of the mark on his chest.

They were both gasping when they broke apart. Before Vaako could ask what was going on Riddick leaned forward and swiped his tongue across Vaako's barely-open mouth. "If you want the ex to stay healthy, keep your lips to yourself next time," he growled.

Vaako snorted and shook his head, refusing to smile. Crazy breeder bastard. He let the hand he'd cupped around Riddick's skull trail downward to graze his nails teasingly down the back of Riddick's neck. But he was deadly serious as he searched eyes that glowed like stars in the dimness of the corridor. "Are you sure about this?"

Riddick's shrug would have had him frowning, but for the tiniest quirk at the corner of Riddick's mouth. Vaako gave one last squeeze, then stepped aside to stand facing the Gates.

His left hand twitched as strong fingers entangled with his own. When he looked down he found Riddick had joined their hands palm-to-palm, fingers interlaced. He glanced up at Riddick and nodded, tightened his grip. He drew a pistol with his right hand when Riddick did the same.

"Do it," was all Riddick said. Their eyes met a moment. Then as Riddick shifted to face the podium, Vaako turned his head to face the Gates.

The opening of the portal was more like the drawing aside of a veil, the undulating waves of blue and black becoming clearer, closer, reaching out...

NEXT

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Date: 2007-06-16 03:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cho-sa.livejournal.com
ugh..... (**dies from utter happiness**) I am absolutely loving this story. If I haven't reviewed before, that's to my shame, because... wow. I eagerly gobble up every chapter that comes out of this. That twist with Vaako... unexpected but considerably HOT paired with Riddick, and I love just love everything about this story. Keep it up! I look forward to your next chapter!

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Date: 2007-06-16 08:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
Thanks so much for letting me know you're still following the story. It's been going on so long, it's hard to tell sometimes if it's just dragged on too long for folks to keep interest.

Jaye

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Date: 2007-06-16 04:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] spikeface.livejournal.com
You know I'm all over the Vaako/Riddick, but I really liked how Vaako leaped at the chance to cautiously consider Celeste a friend again. One of the things I like most about Vaako is the intensity of his dedication, and I'm glad to see that even though he's all swept up by Riddick, he still remembers what he had with Celeste. A nice bittersweet moment amidst all the politics and battle scenes and torrid gay man sex.

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Date: 2007-06-16 08:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
My impression of Vaako is that he stands by you until you force him not to. He and his Dame seemed to have a complex relationship, and he definitely trusted in her abilities and perception. It made sense to me that given the chance, he would want his former Dame on his side, even if she wasn't by his side anymore.

Thanks for your comments!

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Date: 2007-06-16 08:09 pm (UTC)

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Date: 2007-06-17 12:23 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
I agree with the Celeste comment. Too often she is portrayed as greedy to the point of having no self-preservation.

And of course, Vaako. Mmmm. Love the update.

Thanks, Candy Cane

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Date: 2007-06-18 09:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
Her character has been interesting to develop. I know a lot of stories just kill the Dame off to get the Vaakos uncoupled, but she's a striking contrast to Vaako, so politically astute and powerful in a non-physical way.

Thanks for your note!

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Date: 2007-06-18 07:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] luthien-af.livejournal.com
I guess I don't have to say anything else, everything is said already ;).

I agree over Vaako's dedication, and the relationship between him and his wife.

I absolutely *love* this story, and I can't wait until the next chapter! *hugs*

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Date: 2007-06-18 09:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
Well, I appreciate hearing from you, even if you think you have nothing to say. It's always nice to find out your perception of a character or situation agrees with someone else's. Thanks for writing.

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Date: 2007-06-18 11:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] greyinthedark.livejournal.com
Every time I read a new chapter of this I have to fight down the urge to go and read it all the way from the beginning - it's one of the most book-like fanfictions that I've ever read, and as such I seem to have a visceral problem accepting that I'm not getting it all at once. This chapter was particularly lovely with the political dancing, Riddick being as adjustable as only Riddick can, and Vaako still somehow managing to keep his secrets. *loves beyond reason*

...also, we're at the Underverse? Really?

...meep.

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Date: 2007-06-19 12:49 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Thanks so much for your note. (I wonder how much time it would take to read this again from the beginning...it's been going on so long that sometimes I have to revisit chapters to check character details.)

We're at the UnderVerse *finally*. Everything up until now was Phase 1. Phase 2 is UnderVerse, Phase 3 is after UnderVerse. Thank goodness the other two sections aren't anywhere near as long.

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Date: 2007-06-19 12:53 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Sorry, that was me. I thought I was still logged in.---Jaye

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Date: 2007-06-20 04:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] greyinthedark.livejournal.com
Yeah, well, I have the day off tomorrow... so I'll let you know how long it takes. Hee. (It feels like Christmas really, and the sudden instant image of Riddick in a Santa hat is really never going to go away. ^_^)

Also, two things:

First off, hearing that the other two sections aren't anywhere near as long makes me weep into my sleeve rather than 'thank goodness'.

Second... I'll believe it when I see it. *grins*

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Date: 2007-06-20 01:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
I'd swear I've seen Riddick in a Santa hat. Maybe somebody's holiday icon?

Are you perhaps saying I'm a bit verbose? ;) (Not that I'd be able to disagree, considering it took 30 chapters to get to freakin' UnderVerse.)

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Date: 2007-06-20 03:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] moondreamer1.livejournal.com
"We're at the UnderVerse *finally*. Everything up until now was Phase 1. Phase 2 is UnderVerse, Phase 3 is after UnderVerse. Thank goodness the other two sections aren't anywhere near as long."

Nooooooo! This story must go on forever!!

*ducks*

Sorry about that fangirl outburst.

Another well detailed chapter and enjoyable reading. I'll join the other posters in finding Vaako/Celeste very logical. She's not a fool and this is smart writing. I also enjoyed Riddick's reaction.

And now...here we are...waiting...at the gates.

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Date: 2007-06-21 01:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
Ha! At the rate I'm going, it could take *another* year to get the darn thing finished.

I'm glad you like Celeste's continued involvement in the story. (And Riddick's he-man moment. He's such a visceral character I didn't think he'd want Vaako tasting of her for long.)

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Date: 2007-06-21 09:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] toscas-kiss.livejournal.com
I just discovered your journal and wow, brilliant story, I really love it. The depth of the background and the characterisation are great and the plot is excellent. Thanks for sharing! :-)

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Date: 2007-06-21 11:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
Welcome, and thanks for your comments. It's nice to know someone new has liked the story enough to plow through all those chapters.

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Date: 2007-06-25 05:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] foxfire-inferno.livejournal.com
omfg! This is one of the best CoR stories I've read in awhile! I love the idea of Vaako being a Furyan, Especially since I've never seen it done before. I can't wait until the next chapter!

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Date: 2007-06-25 12:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
Welcome, and thanks so much for your comments. If this is the first Vaako-as-Furyan story you've read, you're missing out on Silversun's "Just the Beginning" and its sequel "A Moment in Time." They may still be on adulfanfiction.net, and they're definitely worth a read.

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Date: 2007-06-26 02:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] foxfire-inferno.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! Silversun's stories were terrific. I haven't been on Adultfanfiction for a long time, maybe thats why I've never noticed them? Anyway, I'd like to recommend "Only the Strong" to Whispered Words[Slash Recommendations] the site is at

http://www.fictionresource.com/slash/index.php

please get back to me with your reply!

Ja Ne

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Date: 2007-06-26 02:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
I haven't been on there either since they restricted it so you can't even look at *titles* without doing the proof-of-age thing.

Feel free to rec, and thanks!

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Date: 2007-06-30 03:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lilahthedragon.livejournal.com
This was a fantastic turn of events. The last chapter was just fierce and this seems like a wonderful calm before the storm again. I get a huge kick out of seeing Riddick and Vaako guarding each other's backs. The possessive kiss there at the end was lovely along with the 'keep your lips to yourself' comment. I'm looking forward to what happens when two unpurified Furyans step through that gate.

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Date: 2007-06-30 12:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
Thanks for letting me know what worked for you, especially the kiss. I was trying to find something to express Riddick's possessiveness that Vaako wouldn't balk at.

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Date: 2007-08-04 09:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ladooshka.livejournal.com
Incredible story! I am glad that you are keeping writing a Riddick/Vaako unit! There are only few plots with this pair involved and yours is among the best!

I just wanted to thank you for continuing the Chronicles of Riddick with a delightful addition of Vaako's (lol) . The pair of them is just so fascinating, and one of the best but not the last great thing about your story is that you use such different styles of expression of their thoughts! Very educated of Vaako and very slangish of Riddick!

I had a feeling reading your plot that Vaako might turn to be Furyan as well, and I was glad to find out that I was right, though it's not that I am a smart one here but because you are such a wonderful writer to give a reader hints here and there to think about. Also I am suspecting that both men are surely mates by fate and/or nature. All those unconscious attempts to bite and get to a bloody business lead to believe that their life bonding may very well happen!:) Glad that Vaako didn't bond with his Dame and that she turned out to be only his fuck buddy!! :)))

Amazing job! Please keep writing!

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Date: 2007-08-08 01:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
I never thought of Vaako and his Dame being fuck buddies---that's an interesting way of describing their relationship. Thanks for letting me know you're enjoying the story.

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Date: 2007-08-08 03:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ladooshka.livejournal.com
Did I use the wrong expression?:) What I actually meant that there is no love involved. He may be was smitten at first, but she surely saw him as a huge step to get more power and influence in court.
In my opinion an actress who played Dame Vaako is not that beautiful to be smitten with. Karl Urban surely is! But it's just IMHO anyway:)

I've finished also reading your "First Blood". Incredible story! Loved it! Thanks!

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Date: 2007-08-09 02:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
From the way I understand it, fuck buddies don't have a romantic relationship. Maybe they're friends, maybe they're not, but their sex is purely lust, without any emotions involved. I see the Vaakos as more complex than that, though it's an amusing idea.

Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed "First Blood". It was an interesting trip into vamp!fic.

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Date: 2007-08-10 08:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] werewindle.livejournal.com
I've really enjoyed this. The image of Vaako vaulting over the group of challengers was striking. I think you have your characterizations down quite well. I'm looking forward to the next part. ^_^

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Date: 2007-08-11 03:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
Welcome, and thanks for letting me know you're enjoying the story. I'm hoping to finish the next chapter soon.

Praise where it's more then deserved;;

Date: 2007-08-23 10:33 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
The most amazing take [and by far the most realistic one] of all the Riddick fiction I've read so far. The fact that it's such an intriguing (and probably the most attractive) pairing is a lovely extra. But more then that, a really fantastic piece of writing.

There's so much to say about it. You've taken the story right from where it was without twisting details to suit you (which is very impressive, when you think about it, as the Riddick Chronicles are very detailed and clear cut about a lot of information. You get it right, or you get it completely wrong. You've definitely gone right so far).

You've kept every character as they would be in the films (I love Dame Vaako almost as much as her husband, and it's really just annoying seeing her made out to be a pathetic, two-dimensional bitch in every other fanfiction you see) and managed to weave a beautiful little plot. The story hasn't become about sex or romance (which gets boring fast, in my opinion. And honestly, the idea of flowers and either of Riddick or Vaako) but it keeps everything in balance with the ways the character's would live and act).

The style you write with deserves just as much credit as you attention to the character's, world's and plot.
It's very fast paced, but it keeps the reader's interest. At the same time you seem to know just when to slow down and slip little unimportant's in to make the audience really imagine the scene or emotion. Another thing that really struck me was the personal touches you give each character, or even objects. Weapons, for example. Probably the first time I really paid attention to it was quite a bit earlier on when Celeste was arguing with Vaako; 'her fists clenched and her skirts flared', or something similar (too lazy to go back and check now, but I hope you get the point). It just sprang out and seemed like the perfect way to describe Dame Vaako's anger. Usually, a facial expression would be used to tell emotion's, but the Dame's a much more physical person, and uses body language to manipulate that around her. It just makes sense that her body would be what's described in that instance.

Or maybe it was just me =]

There are a few bits and pieces that it'd have preferred to be different, but they weren't big things, and were more symbols, I'm guessing. Vaako's hair and possibly even his 'tin can suit' I'd have liked for him to keep, but that's just my preferences. I can imagine him with long hair <3

I could go on, but I'm pretty much just rambling.
Anyway, I'm hoping you do continue this and write more about this particular pairing, your very much appreciated on this side.
xxxSonny

Re: Praise where it's more then deserved;;

Date: 2007-08-31 12:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaye-voy.livejournal.com
Welcome, and thanks so much for sharing your thoughts about "Only the Strong". I've been trying to find some time to get the next chapter finished, and it certainly helps to know folks are looking forward to it.

You're right, by the way---losing the suit and the hair were symbols of Vaako's change from pure Necromonger to something else.

Jaye

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Date: 2009-08-25 08:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sevedra.livejournal.com
I really like how jealous and territorial Riddick is of Vaako.

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Date: 2015-03-27 12:47 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] akira17
yayayyayayayayyay go Riddick you romantic breeder bastard bringing your boy with you to the threshold!
great show of trust, lovely chapter